Due to the feedback I received, I have now made the changes and finalised this story. I reworded and restructured the first couple of paragraphs, making key information stand out and draw the audience to read on. I also checked it and got rid of unnecessary repetition.
I have an infographic that I made using piktochart, all the information used was from research and press releases that were sent to me. I believe it looks good and I also have a graph that I made using infogr.am. It adds detail to the piece and helps to visually back up what the story is about.